Monday, 16 July 2012

Hookers & Hangers Bloghop: Hookers!

The lovely peeps at Falling For Fiction are hosting a "Hookers and Hangers" Bloghop.

The deal is today we post the first line of each chapter and on Wednesday we post the last line. The link above will take you to the post detailing all about it and most importantly all the other lovely awesome people posting their Hookers today! So you should definitely check it out.

Today is those "Hookers" to see how well we hook you in.
These are from my soon to be queried (I hope) novel "Networked", a YA thriller set in the near future about a girl, Devon, trying to find out what happened to her missing, presumed dead, brother.

My First Five Hookers for the Hookers & Hangers Bloghop!

1. I hadn't escaped the Network, exactly.
2. I disconnected, unable to talk to anyone.
3.I struggled to match Dad's pace as he strode toward the school’s main door.
4. I sloped along the corridor, peeking in classrooms as I went.
5. By the final class, Government and Politics, no new idea had magically arrived in my brain like I hoped.


I would love to know what you think, and I mean that genuinely, if you wouldn't read on that's kind of useful information!

Hangers will be up Wed, and I'll be back tonight to check out everybody else's - Yay!
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  1. Kyra Lennon16 July 2012 at 09:53

    I really love your first hooker - very intriguing!

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  2. Jade Hart16 July 2012 at 10:05

    The first couple have me hooked. I'm intrigued in what is the net... and the last one about the idea in your brain oozed voice. Number 3 and 4 weren't as WOW, but they were still interesting. In conclusion - I would read on :) Good job. :)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:44

      Thank you. I agree, 3 and 4 probably aren't as strong - was an interesting exercise for me listing these out and has certainly made me look at them anew! Thank you for commenting!

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  3. Alex J. Cavanaugh16 July 2012 at 12:52

    I admire anyone who can write in first person.

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:45

      I actually reworked this novel into 1st because close 3rd just wasn't working for me! Thanks for commenting.

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  4. Stina16 July 2012 at 12:56

    The first one nailed it for me! Good luck with querying. :D

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:45

      Thank you v. much! (Esp for the luck!)

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  5. Clare16 July 2012 at 13:31

    Great hookers, thanks for sharing. :)

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  6. Majanka Verstraete16 July 2012 at 13:59

    I love the first one! The title of your novel sounds great as well. Good luck querying! :)

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  7. Lisa Regan16 July 2012 at 15:26

    I really like the first one. Definitely makes me want to read more and find out what the Network is and why this narrator is talking about escaping it! Let me know if I can be of any assistance as you begin querying!

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:46

      Thank you so much gosh esp with the querying offer of help, I may take you up on that ;)

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  8. Jennie Bennett16 July 2012 at 16:42

    I really liked your first line and your last line. Makes me wonder what the book is about :)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:46

      Thank you, glad those two are working for you!

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  9. Emily R. King16 July 2012 at 17:07

    I wanted to know what happens next!

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  10. Tobi Summers16 July 2012 at 17:19

    I really like that last one. I can relate!

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:47

      Hee, me too, thank you for commenting!

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  11. prerna pickett16 July 2012 at 18:07

    I would have kept on reading!

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  12. Hope Roberson16 July 2012 at 18:39

    Excellent start to your story! Hooker #1 is awesome! As are the rest ;)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:48

      Thank you very much, especially for running this great bloghop, it's really been interesting to look at these on their own merits.

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  13. Cassie Mae16 July 2012 at 19:13

    I really liked the last one. I thought it had a great voice! Can't wait to see the hangers :)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:49

      Thank you, especially for running this, it's really fun and interesting to join in on!

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  14. Leigh Covington16 July 2012 at 21:54

    These are great! The story sounds really interesting!

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  15. Thea Landen16 July 2012 at 22:41

    I like the second one! It's brief, but that just means there are so many possibilities!

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  16. Amber16 July 2012 at 23:44

    I love the premise of this story!! The internet hookers really peaked my interests as well.

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  17. Tara Tyler16 July 2012 at 23:46

    excellent! i feel her awkward tension! really like the first and last ones!

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:50

      Thank you very much, interesting to hear those two are going down well ;)

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  18. VikLit17 July 2012 at 02:50

    I went to publish a few lovely people's comments and Blogger rejected them! Am sure I pressed publish :( so if your comment isn't here I am sorry and trying to fix it! I don't know what weirdness happened.

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  19. Jenny S. Morris17 July 2012 at 03:19

    The first one has be knowing that I want to read more and find out what the Network is. The second continues to draw my interest. Great job!!

    See ya on Wednesday for hangers.

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:50

      Thank you, am looking forward to the hangers!

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  20. Amanda Olivieri17 July 2012 at 03:42

    Ohh, LOVE the first one! Definitely makes me want to read more. So intriguing. The last one is great, too :D

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:51

      Thank you, glad to know they both work well!

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  21. Jeannette17 July 2012 at 04:41

    The first one is the most interesting for me, which is good if it's the first line of your book! I'm a new subscriber courtesy of this bloghop - it's been great for finding similar blogs!

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:54

      Thank you, happy the first one works! I am following you too, it is v. good bloghop helping to find new people.

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  22. Unknown17 July 2012 at 04:54

    The opener is quite strong, pulling me in to want to know more. What is the Network? That would keep me reading.

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  23. Kelley Lynn17 July 2012 at 05:21

    One thing to note, the first four all have the same structure (though they are SUPER interesting). I 'verb' and the rest of the sentence. Might want to look just to be sure your sentence structure is varied. Helps with flow and stuff.

    Just something to keep in mind since you're querying soon! Good luck! I'm so glad I'm follow you now so I can follow your journey :)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:56

      Thank you, and thank you for running this bloghop- because without pulling them out and putting them separately next to each other I would never have been able to see the similar opening structure. I will definitely vary it, thank you for the tip and the follow.

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  24. Elizabeth Seckman17 July 2012 at 07:44

    I like #5 the best. And I'm curious what the network is too.

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  25. EM Castellan17 July 2012 at 09:00

    I like #1 and #5, great hooks! Thanks for stopping by my blog :)

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:57

      Thank you for picking those out and for stopping by here!

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  26. Rachel17 July 2012 at 13:48

    I love these hooks. I'm really intrigued by your plot and it sounds so good. Good luck querying it! :-) Thanks for sharing today and I look forward to Wednesday's post

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    1. VikLit17 July 2012 at 17:58

      Thank you for the good luck wishes, and the comment, much appreciated.

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  27. Lynn(e) Schmidt17 July 2012 at 15:26

    These are excellent hooks. I like the first one a lot, but the Network sounds like Division from PUSH, or the District from Hunger Games, or Skynet from Terminator. It's my favorite, but is there a way to make it new? (Even still, I would definitely read on! Looking forward to your hangers!!)

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    1. VikLit21 July 2012 at 14:44

      Thank you for the point and I definitely take it on board. Glad to know you'd read on anyway.

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  29. Nick Wilford17 July 2012 at 23:35

    I'd sure read on! The voice is excellent. I'm a sucker for a "looking for a missing person" story!

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    1. VikLit21 July 2012 at 14:45

      Ah me too! Thank you for saying so, tis nice of you to let me know!

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  30. 1000th.monkey18 July 2012 at 00:47

    Seems like an interesting concept... reminds me of 'Kimmie66' by Aaron Alexovich (may have spelled that last name wrong...)

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    1. VikLit21 July 2012 at 14:45

      Oooh will have to look it up, thanks for the ref! And the comments ;)

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  31. Unknown18 July 2012 at 12:48

    Intriguing hooks! #1 is my favourite!

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  32. Trisha20 July 2012 at 05:54

    I really like these - great voice, as others mentioned. The first line is definitely a hooker, fascinating!

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  33. Ink in the Book20 July 2012 at 06:46

    #1 makes me wonder what the Network is why she wants to escape.Nice job hookin' me:)

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